Sunday, July 10, 2011

welcome to 6 Sentence Sunday

I'm back!!! Welcome to 6 Sentence Sunday! Be sure and check out all the other great authors participating in this awesome sampling of work! Here's the link http://sixsunday.com

And here's this installment...Lauryl has disappeared and Eamon has tracked her to Tampa Florida. While passing time in a bookstore, a young woman catches his eye.

Her brown eyes, which burned with irritation at him, drew his attention. They looked almost black against her porcelain skin. She was lovely, like a little gothic doll. He walked over to the aisle where she was and stood a few feet from her. The music that overflowed from the earbuds was from La Bohème. He shifted his position and the delicious smell of her floral perfume and natural scent drifted over to him. He took a deep breath of her, leaned an elbow on the shelf and picked up a book on Tarot cards.

14 comments:

  1. Great description of the woman. Wonder if Eamon has any success with her.

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  2. Nice setup. Interesting character.

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  3. Wow he's keen! Nice scene :)

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  4. Yaaaay! I like this. Great descriptions. I like Eamon's character

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  5. Love how you set things up for something interesting. Like Eamon might forget the reason he's in FL

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  6. Hi,

    Nice snippet, great description of female and good sense of place/atmosphere! La Bohème won me over straight off!! ;)

    best
    F

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  7. Love the description! Great snip

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  8. Very nice, I can clearly picture this mystery woman.

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  9. "...lovely like a little gothic doll" that is great, it paints such a vivid picture! Great 6!

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  10. Hmmm. Wonder where this is going!

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  11. Nice description, but putting *little* in front of *gothic doll* made me think teenager, not young woman.

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  12. Nice! I like the description of the girl as a gothic doll. Good imagery!

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